free the pen, a blog for writers

October 1, 2011

The Power of Eliminating in Writing

Filed under: writing techniques — freethepen @ 7:11 pm

Unless you are writing a stream of consciousness piece or a memoir, you might be overusing pronouns. Narratives too often use many pronouns, but are they really necessary to begin with? Practice writing by avoiding pronouns and instead add words of actions. Your written piece might just get a fresh new flavor. Try it. Take a paragraph or short piece. Circle all the pronouns and remove them.

If you don’t have a piece of your own to work on, try these sentences:

1. She walked up the stairs because she felt something was going on in her bedroom.

2. In her mailbox was a note from her mother who, she believed, loved her dearly.

3. His job was calling him to work overtime so he could pay for all the things his wife wanted.

4. He knew if he went to the movies he would run into his ex-girlfriend and her new boyfriend.

5. The cat played until it fell over and then it slept until they all came home from their busy jobs.

Re-write these sentences. Send them to me. Tell me what you learned.

Until next time.

keep the pen free.


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